Information Report

We are learning how to write an information report using information we gather through research














One of my personal writing goals is:


Organise writing into paragraphs with related ideas.



Evidence I am developing this in my writing:


I made my writing into paragraphs. (the red lines)












Insert an image of your final / teacher conferenced draft:












Publish your Information Report here:


Alpacas are the soft and strong creatures! There are 2 breeds of Alpacas, Huacaya and the Suri.


Alpacas are part of the camel family. The smallest of its family. They are 3 feet tall ground to shoulders and 4 to 7 feet long, thats 120cm to 225cm long and 91.4cm tall. They weigh 55 to 65 kg.


Alpacas are vegetarians mostly eat grass, leaves, wood, bark or stems. They mostly live in high dry areas of mountains usually.


Alpacas are domesticated sides of vicunas that are camelids of sort. These species evolved into guanacos and vicunas. Around 6,000 years ago people in the Andres began to tame them.


Alpacas are non aggressive creatures compared to llamas . They are easy to tame.! They spit occasionally when their food or cria is threatened. They need company and will DIE of loneliness! They respond well to good living attention.

Matariki

WALT: write Matariki poetry

   Matariki

  The stars of the sky

Shine bright to lead the way

Restore nature and the food

This night is to remember

The cluster of stars will lead the way

Lead us to the ocean and new land

Colour of stars shine like the sun

Giving us what we need

To be together

E-portfolio Writing - My Camp Experience - The Giant Swing

Describe It - Camp Experiences

Learning Objectives:

Level 3

• Select, form, and communicate ideas on a range of topics.
  
  
• Use language features appropriately, showing a developing understanding of their effects.
  
  
• Organise texts, using a range of appropriate structures.
  
  
• Show a developing understanding of how to shape texts for different purposes and audiences.
  
  

Level 4.

• Select, develop, and communicate ideas on a range of topics.
  
  
• Use a range of language features appropriately, showing an increasing understanding of their effects.
  
  
• Organise texts. Using a range of appropriate structures.
  
  
• Show an increasing understanding of how to shape texts for different purposes and audiences.
  
  

Learning goals:

• To ‘Show, Don’t Tell’ the reader by painting a picture with words.
  
  
• A variety of sentence starters
  
  
• A variety of sentence lengths
  
  
• Edit and rework
  
  
• Effective peer checking and feedback

Horrified, shaking dramatically rising up from the ground like a bird taking lift off.

While up there it’s a struggle to breathe my whole body was numb.

Swinging back and forth front and back feeling like I fainted once maybe twice

I'm sure my group can see me quivering and howling. My stomach rising up and

down like its dislodged breathing got heavier and heavier as people move on!

Getting down like solid land wasn’t a thing! Crawling, to get the harness off it

had to come off immediately!

Student Reflection: In my writing, one of my goals is Ask others for their feedback on writing and respond to their ideas. I did show this goal here because when I did my buddy mark my buddy read it out to me and I narrowed down the ''I's''. In my writing, one of my goals is Check spelling, punctuation and grammar. I did not show this goal here because I didn't have much punctuation (I had 2 commas in my writing). My next step is to attempt complex punctuation '' , - ( ) Teacher Comment: Sarah, I like how you hook the reader in from the very first sentence in this piece of writing. You have used a variety of sentence lengths for impact. I loved reading this! Your next step is to have a go at using complex punctuation.

Term 2 Writing Sample - Persuasive Speech

        My speech.

I like the way I had a good structure for my speech

I like the way I spoke fluently and clear

I need to work on action and props

Detective

Hello there My name is detective Sausage, a level 4 detective partnered with Nicole ward also a level 4 detective. me and Nicole have seen nothing like this crime the date happened was the 29th of April 2018. I observed the scene at 21:20 Monday 30th of April 2018 the day after it happened. the place of crime was at kaiapoi north school in Tiwai, the creative cave.

My evidence was phenomenal. there were white floury hands on a top cupboard at the other end of the fish tank. By the rooms 18 and 19 doors there was a glass with pink red lipstick on the rim so my guess is that they drank maybe they water. On the closest table to the glass there was an orange vest, would have checked for a name but I couldn't. And someones been to hong kong because there was a coin on the same table as the vest. A sand coloured had with a black strip around the middle sitting on the floor right next to the coin and vest. On another table was a very gross lift bottle, thinking it was empty by a snapped ruler. Right next to that was a fallen chair with a note saying " Ha Ha Payback for anoying me ". The most outragious thing was the fish tank that belonged to Miss T was gone as soon as I saw this I thausht to myself somethings fishy around here! Some stones and a plant was the last remaining peices of it. A red water bottle that people won at cross country was becide the remaining parts of the fish. A muddy footpring that Nicole thinks is a converse. There was blue paint withletters saying "Rea". And a peice of paper with fingerprints! There was a white hand on a black wall next to a muddy footprint on a desk. By the white floury white hands on the top cupboard was a red Nescafe cup with some black tea in it. Fingerprints on the TV witch the teachers may have touched or the criminal? there was also paper on the floor

My top suspect is Miss bayless because she always weres lipstick and she has that hat (i think). She wheres converse that the footprint mach.

My Letter to Mr. Hipkins

Kaiapoi north school
278 Williams street
Kaiapoi 7630

Tuesday 20 February 2018

Ministry of education
Government buildings
Wellington

Dear Mr. Hipkins,

I hope you agree on my letter on having air conditioning in our classroom. By the way my name is Sarah Sandford a student at kaiapoi north school.

I bet you are the nicest person anyone will ever meet and I love the way you take other people's opinions.

It's too stuffy in the classroom and I don’t want to put up with sweat dripping off my forehead like rain anymore. I'm itching like feathers are dancing on me.

Won’t it be easier to learn in coldness rather than heat?

Thanks for reading my letter.
Yours sincerely,
Sarah Sandford